Style errors: essay with all e-rater Style errors

Modified on Wed, 01 Nov 2023 at 05:10 AM

The following essay deliberately incorporates each of the e-rater Style errors to serve as an example. (See a list of e-rater Style errors).

The Impact of Social Media on Society

The impact of social media on society is significant. The impact can't be ignored. [401] With the advent of platforms like Facebook and Twitter, interactions have been more easy. [402] But the implications are vast. [403] Conversations happen. [404]

The issue with these platforms, which are designed to connect people and facilitate conversation but often contribute to a sense of disconnection and exacerbate divisive issues, is that they can have a dual nature. [405] The impact of social media is often assessed in studies. [406]

Feedback Mapping

  • 401 - REPETITION OF WORDS: The word "impact" has been repeated multiple times in the essay. Consider using synonyms for variety.

  • 402 - INAPPROPRIATE WORDS OR PHRASES: In "interactions have been more easy," the phrase "more easy" is inappropriate in academic writing. Use "easier" instead.

  • 403 - SENTENCES BEGINNING WITH COORDINATING CONJUNCTIONS: The sentence "But the implications are vast," starts with a coordinating conjunction "But," and could be combined with the previous sentence.

  • 404 - SHORT SENTENCES: The sentence "Conversations happen." is too short and could be combined with another for better flow.

  • 405 - LONG SENTENCES: The sentence "The issue with these platforms..." is quite long and could be broken down for clarity.

  • 406 - PASSIVE VOICE: The sentence "The impact of social media is often assessed in studies," uses passive voice. Consider revising to use active voice, such as "Studies often assess the impact of social media."

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